Monday, December 12, 2005

Javann, if you liked the little comment I left a couple posts ago, maybe you'll also enjoy the children's book I'm in the process of writing. It's called The Adventures of Damon the Tooth: Love Doesn't Exist. Because kids need to know these things. Of course, it's not finished. This is about the first half. Oddly enough, I'm having trouble writing a happy ending. I'm getting Jon Houser to illistrate it with artwork.
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Page one
Picture: Damon looking sad.

Text: Damon the Tooth is in limbic-limbo. Recent events of his life have convinced him that “Love” doesn’t exist!

Page two
Picture: The duck and the fox are cuddling outdoors while Damon is watching them from a distance with a resentful look on his face.

Text: The Duck and the Fox are in love.

Page three
Picture: The duck and the fox are talking to Damon.

Text: “You should go find a pretty lady-tooth to be friends with, Damon!” said the Duck.

“Land ho!” said the Fox.

Page four
Picture: Damon holding up his hands defensively so as to explain himself whiles the duck and the fox listen.

Text: “Well I’d love to, friends. But unfortunately ‘Love’ doesn’t exist!” said Damon with confidence.

Page five
Picture: The duck and the fox have looks on there faces as if they’re trying to convince Damon of something. Damon has a look indicating that he’s listening to them attentively.

Text: “Why, of course love exists!” said the Fox.

Page Six
Picture: Damon with his pointer finger up and his eyes closed, looking very resolute. The Duck and the Fox are watching him, listening.

Text: “Nay, friends!” exclaimed Damon. “’Love’ is a metaphysical speculation that we use to mask other individuals shortcomings! It is merely the tangible being romanticized into the abstract! Indeed, ‘Love’ is nothing but a ridiculous biochemical reaction!”

Page seven
Picture: The duck and the fox have looks on there faces as if they’re trying to convince Damon of something. Damon has a look indicating that he’s listening to them attentively.

Text: The Fox didn’t believe Damon. “No way, Damon! What about the great feeling I get inside whenever I’m with the Duck? What about those times when I’m so in love with the Duck that I can’t think strait? That is love!”

Page eight
Picture: Damon with his pointer finger up, his eyes closed, and his mouth open as if in mid-speak, looking very resolute. The Duck and the Fox are watching him, listening.

Text: “Actually that great feeling is the neurotransmitter dopamine flooding your frontal lobe! This interferes with logical thought processes and can thus addle your thinking abilities (those moments you can’t think straight you’re so in love!). It can also cause problems in the central nervous system causing your hands to shake or your knees to wobble (I’m trembling, I’m so in love!). So you see, the Fox, ‘Love’ doesn’t exist!”

Page nine
Picture: duck and the fox have looks on there faces as if they’re trying to convince Damon of something. Damon has a look indicating that he’s listening to them attentively.

Text: “But every time I’m with the Fox my heart is racing!” said the Duck. “When I’m with the Fox I feel like everything is going to be okay! That is love!”

Page ten
Picture: Damon with his pointer finger up, his eyes closed, and his mouth open as if in mid-speak, looking very resolute. The Duck and the Fox are watching him, listening.

Text: “Actually that’s simply what happens when norepinephrine, epinephrine, and phenylethylamine create a surge that causes your limbic system* to take over!” said Damon the Tooth. “You see, this causes a shift in brain power away from the cortex and thus you begin doing crazy, illogical things that you normally would not do because you’re “so in love.” That, friends, is ‘Love’!”

* A group of brain structures. The system is activated by motivated behavior and arousal, and it influences the endocrine and autonomic motor systems. In other words the Limbic system controls most of your emotional faculties.

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And that's all I have so far! Any input would be appreciated, all. I'm open to ideas for the ending. In fact, I simply need help with it.

7 comments:

Itzjerm said...

i'm liking it...

have some concepts on endings

let me think on it... and have time to write it

Javann said...

I'm quite impressed. I don't know many children's authors. I'd like to see how it turns out. Unlike my friend Jeremy, I've no advice for you. I think its pretty good so far. Extremely technical in its language, but that is what gives it its charm I think. Its pretty good.

Itzjerm said...

OK,

Seems in two days i've had no time to write up an ending...

But here is the concept

they continue to talk...

it gets to the point where the fox begins to comprehend what damon is saying... with passing explenations ... the focus being on ones own desire... the fox begins to turn inward... and out comes this desire to eat his friend the duck

the duck is clueless to this...

and do to its love is chewed up by the fox...

the fox in haste then turns toward damon the tooth to eat him

he soon realizes this... goes to turn

but is gobbled up...

however he is not eaten but fills a gap in the foxes mouth...

and they find a state of a symbiotic relationship

the fox has a tooth now... the tooth has a warm home

and therefore the symbiotic relationship is what love is is the conclusion

i'll leave it to you on writing all that... if ya like the concept.... you have to keepthe writing style going...

its a good story could be good linear notes and song for the next bouybee uybee album.

Javann said...

Uh. . .that's crap Jeremy. Don't take my criticism personally. I mean, you're a good person. But man. That really isn't very good.



I kid I kid. Its not a bad ending.

Jonathan said...

Actually I really like that. I think it might get a moral across while still staying true to the style and mood of the first half. I'll definately try to write something out based on that.

cheers Jerm

Itzjerm said...

speaking of cheers

I emailed Tom,

He said he was gonna hook me up with somethin... (we'll see)

and said they tour next year on the new album

and also that there may future use of the video..
ha who cares... i've been gettin the hook up for over a year ;0)

Jonathan said...

Excellent. I'd be down with getting the Tom hook up again. Like last time... when I nearly got stuck outside cause he didn't save me a ticket. Hehe.

Guess I can't complain though since I still got in, but it was close!